#OctPoWriMo – Day 2 – Retourne Poem – Peace on Earth

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#OctPoWriMo – Day 2Retourne Poem – Peace on Earth

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October Poetry Writing Month at #OctPoWriMo!

Theme for 2018 is a one lined quote that gives me a idea for the Poem. Quotes are copied from Goodreads.com – tag poetry.

On Wednesday (NZ time) my poem will be my usual Tanka, Poetry Weekly Challenge , Friday Alphabet Haiku, which is a Weekly Challenge of Abigail Gronway, last week it was the letter (M)

“Peace is always beautiful.” – Walt Whitman

Peace on Earth

freedom from all disturbances
just like a pond with no ripples
calm in the face of strife and stress
accepting the sense of pure bliss

just like a pond with no ripples
whispers on the breeze echoing
shimmering of the autumn leaves
bathing in the brightness of light

calm in the face of strife and stress
flowing with wings of an angel
with a golden dove in the hands
flying to the heavens above

accepting the sense of pure bliss
as peace is always beautiful
calmness transition into grace
value of silence never gone

Retourne Poetry is a French form of poetry and its all about repetition. It contains four quatrains and each line has eight syllables. (16 lines, 8/8/8/8)

The trick is that the first stanza second line must also be the second stanza first line, the first stanza third line is the third stanza first, and the first stanza fourth line is the fourth stanza first.

Retournes do not have to rhyme. (rhyme optional)

Copyright © 2018 Elsie Hagley

 

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19 comments

    • Thanks for the kind comment. Yes the Retourne form of poetry is interesting, I didn’t rhyme the two I wrote, next one I write I will rhyme it, that will make it harder, which I like when writing poetry, makes my brain work harder. Hope you are having a great day.

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  1. I’ve read this poem a couple times now. The other day I didn’t have time to let it sink in, so I left the tab open and came back to it. The phrase “a pond with no ripples” has stuck with me all this time. I’ve seen such a pond. It means there’s no wind. And yet the poem you used to convey your message has ripples—in the lines of the first stanza that are repeated in the succeeding stanzas. This causes me to wonder if we will ever see permanent peace in this life, or if we must content ourselves with the momentary peace that comes our way, like the lull in the wind that produces, if only briefly, a pond with no ripples. You have given me much to ponder. (Intentional pun there) 🙂 Peace to you, my friend!

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    • Yes I have been back and ponder on your comment, and yes it is true a pond can have no ripples if there is no breeze, that what happens, it is how the stanzas were repeated, but maybe that is why there is no peace on earth, as I have not found it yet in my old age. Maybe I should have written it different.

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