Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #67 Troiku – Apple Blossoms

Apple Blossoms

Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #67 Troiku – Apple Blossoms

Troiku – Carpe Diem invented the Troiku, it is three haiku, with each of the three lines from a suggested haiku as the first line of each haiku in the troiku. It’s not always possible to have a 5-7-5 format in the second haiku, due to the limitations of the suggested haiku.

Apple Blossoms Poetry by Jane Reichhold

light carried in my arms

apple blossoms from a neighbor

on my doorstep

© Jane Reichhold (1937-2016)

Apple Blossoms Troiku Poem By Elsie Hagley

light carried in my arms

fallen white apple blossoms

filling compost bin

 – – – 

apple blossoms from a neighbor

littering the ground

white just like spring snow

 – – –

on my doorstep

slippery with apple blossom

sweeping clean with broom

Copyright © 2019 Elsie Hagley

Apple Blossoms Poetry by Jane Reichhold

clusters talking

together in admiration

apple blossoms

© Jane Reichhold (1937-2016)

Apple Blossoms Troiku Poem By Elsie Hagley

clusters talking

as bees buzz around petals

gently picks nectar

 – – –

together in admiration

observed by children

wonders of nature

 – – – 

apple blossoms

still falling from the branches

in the gentle breeze

Copyright © 2019 Elsie Hagley

Apple Blossoms Poetry by Jane Reichhold

sun transformed

into apple blossoms

the ground is level

© Jane Reichhold (1937-2016)

Apple Blossoms Troiku Poem By Elsie Hagley

sun transformed

as petals fell down on me

from the apple tree

 – – –

into apple blossoms

bees kept gathering nectar

pollen on their legs

 – – – 

the ground is level

still white with apple blossom

nature provides food

Copyright © 2019 Elsie Hagley

the dam is broken

spring cascades into valleys

as apple blossoms

© Jane Reichhold (1937-2016)

Apple Blossoms Troiku Poem By Elsie Hagley

the dam is broken

spring is very dry this year

lack of water  now

 – – – 

spring cascades into valleys

fresh growth not showing

harsh winter still shows

 – – – 

as apple blossoms

show distress withering down

could be a small crop

Copyright © 2019 Elsie Hagley

Our challenge was to choose from four  given haiku and create not only a fusion-ku but also a troiku hineri from the fusion-ku – a troiku with a twist:

We have to create nine new haiku with the separated lines of our first three haiku of the regular troika, which makes twelve new haiku as well as the fusion-ku!

The four haiku I worked with, are all haiku by Jane Reichhold and were taken from her online Saijiki “A Dictionary of Haiku”, Spring section. 

I have written four Troiku’s from the chosen Haiku’s by Jane Reichhold but don’t understand what the rest of the challenge is, maybe someone that understands can advise me.

5 comments

  1. You did great Elsie, not completly the idea, but these are all wonderful. The “hineri” (twist) was to use the separated lines of the first Troiku’s three new haiku to create new haiku. But you really did an awesome job.

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    • Thanks for replying, and explaining, I have lost track of your blog lately, must catch up and try a little harder to understand in the future. Hope you are enjoying your new job. Cheers my friend.

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